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08-28-2009, 05:23 AM
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i wrote some shit for a new song and i'm not shure if the grammar or terms are right (i'm not that god in english 'couse i'm german). maybe someone could correct me if it is not ok. thx
here it is: work hard for the econemy work a lot and act friendly take some drinks in the evening see the commercials on the screen monday to friday assimilation brick by brick degeneration got to fit in the e-generation prosperity for all, for all who be controlled prosperity for all, for all who be controlled ashes to ashes, dust to dust nine to five i give a fuck ashes to ashes, dust to dust nine to five i give a fuck one way tickets for all citizen bread and games for easy living pills for well-being and shiny hair health insurance for the aftercare monday to friday assimilation brick by brick degeneration got to fit in the e-generation prosperity for all, for all who be controlled prosperity for all, for all who be controlled ashes to ashes, dust to dust nine to five i give a fuck ashes to ashes, dust to dust nine to five i give a fuck Last edited by Krawallica : 08-28-2009 at 05:57 AM.
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08-28-2009, 07:14 AM
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take some drinks in the evening: have some drinks is probably better one way tickets for all citizen: one way ticket for all citizens;citizen should be plural, tickets shouldn't. That's about all I'd correct grammatically.
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Decisively challenged Last edited by Lady Grenade : 08-28-2009 at 07:25 AM.
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08-29-2009, 03:41 AM
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